Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
In today's progressive world, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of job in our life. Some people prefer to work only three days a week for long hours. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold the opposite opinion. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I think that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, working only three days a week, you will have more time to learn functional and helpul skills. To be more specific, people will have more time to dedicate their life to things that they really like, such as a sport. As a result, they will develop new ideas and concepts to achieve their personal goals. Take my own experience as an example. When I was an university student, I used to work three time a week in a restaurant. In this time, I used to use my free time to improve my grades at university and I used the payment to buy a car. So, after five years, I could buy a good car and graduate at university with good grades. If I had not work only for three days a week, nor could I buy a car, neither could I achieve my objectives.
The second reason that coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that, people who work only three days a week, even with long hours in their job have a good lifestyle. In other words, these people will have less stress and worries in their life. Hence, they will have more free time to enjoy with family and friends. For instance, an experimental experience conducted by some master psychology professors shows that people who work three or less days a week can have a better mental health than people who work four or more days a week. Moreover, this research argues that these people will not develop mental diseases, such as depression, because of the lack of professional worries.
In conclusion, take the above reasons into account, I strongly believe that a job where you work for three days, not only provide for people a good range of skills and knowledges, but it also increases the lifestyle and the mental health of the people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5165394402 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44125537513 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493638676845 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5571052045 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4210526316 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362608217845 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105700185514 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111376232018 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220101122809 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490698384979 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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