TPO28- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
In today's progressive world, no one can turn a blin eye to the significant effects of education in children's life. Some people argues that parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold the opposite opinion. Although both sides take their own positions, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, currently parents have more access of information than in the past. In other words, new ideas and concepts can be very useful to develop parent's knowledge in order to be more involved in their children's education. Take my own experience as a example. When I was a child, my dad was really involved in my education. For example, he taught for me functional and helpful skills for me achieve goals in education. As a result, I could get valuable experiences to have a graduation in economy. If my dad had not involved in my education, nor could I get skills for my future neither could I be an economist.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that, nowadays parents can relive their stress and worries with the help from internet. To be more specific, the correct support provide by the internet, parents can increase their self-confidence, hence they will be more active in their children's education. For instance, an experimental research conducted by some master professors shows that parents who have a good support to solve their worries had a positive impact in their children's education. Also, this research posits that the number of parents who are interested in their children's education increased.
In conclusion, take the above reasons into account, I strongly believe that parents are more involved in their children's education than they were in the past, not only for the increase of the informations, knowledge, ideas and concepts, but also for the support from the internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ns education. Take my own experience as a example. When I was a child, my dad was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98250728863 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77486395201 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498542274052 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7272770891 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.529411765 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1764705882 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335653857091 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118771117598 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135346306666 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23707536552 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719189352812 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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