Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout centuries, this issue that the governments how to allocate their budgets have always been crucial subject since it has widespread consequences and outcomes. With this in mind, some people believe that improving access to the internet has more priority rather than improving public transportation, while others look at this concept from a distinctive perspective and hold this opinion that improving public transportation brings about more direct and indirect advantages in comparison to improving internet access. I, personally, subscribe to the latter group for quite a few reasons, two of which are as follow.
For one thing, the pivotal burden of any government is to provide the health and safety of its members and citizens and improving public transportation has direct impact on these two elements. In other words, by improving public transportation like buses, airplanes, trains and so on governments are able to prevent from a great number of accidents due to technical imperfections and old devices. A great example of this issue is some countries in which there are insufficient attention towards integrity of public transportation system, and each day we listen or watch in news that too many accidents happens in such countries. Additionally, by improving the public transportation system not only can societies access to healthy environment but governments can save their budgets on spending thier money on reducing air and water pollution as well. To consistents with this issue, statistically proved that the countries which have improved public transportation system have less pollution particles in air and water and consequently have less health problems.
Another equally momentous point that should be mentioned is that improving public transportation cause indirect cascade benefits. What I mean is, by mentioned approach, citizens prefer to use public vehicles rather that their personal cars and as a results there would be less traffic jams in streets. This brings about more advantages since not only can people reach to their offices in time, but they also do not become frustrated and tired in the way to go to their work. Hence, people have more proficiency during work hours and they have better performance and satisfaction since they do not lose quite a bit time in traffic. To illustrate my point of view, I would like to provide a quote from Oprah Winfrey who once said:” Improving transportation system is not a task that easily be ignored and if do, both governments and citizens would be affected. This clearly indicates the importance of improving transportation system in comparison to any plan.
To sum it up, according to all reasons that discussed above, I, strongly, agree that improving public transportation system is more prominent than improving internet access since this approach not only do help the health and safety of society members be guaranteed, but also brings about more proficiency and better performance and as a result satisfaction among citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...r quite a few reasons, two of which are as follow. For one thing, the pivotal burden of ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
... rather that their personal cars and as a results there would be less traffic jams in str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, look, so, well, while, i mean, as a result, for one thing, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2553.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35220125786 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02135350738 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505241090147 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.1952462792 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.2 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288698219846 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945083945987 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700769140973 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194081598012 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510407327473 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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