Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that is is more important for the government to improve the Internet access, while others think that it should spend more effort updating public transportation. Based on my personal experience, I think that updating the Internet access is a better option for governors to consider due to the three reasons mentioned below.

First, the government should save money whenever possible, and upgrading the country's internet condition can make people save a lot of money. Take the city where I live, Taipei, as an example. The mayor of Taipei City spent only $10,000 upgrading its city's network infrastructure to make sure that every citizen in Taipei City can have free access to the Internet. Moreover, they also allocated less than $100,000 dollars hiring engineers to maintain the steadiness of the network system. Nonetheless, the governments of Hualien County wasted more than $1,000,000 on its railway stations, and only few people is using them. Additionally, they also disbursed more than a thousand million dollar planning to revive its highway system by abolishing all highways and establishing new ones. Consequently, it is clear than updating public transportation is more costly than updating the Internet access.

Secondly, the government generally place an emphasis on its reputation, and providing state-of-the-art internet infrastructure to the public can help it earn a good image. For example, politicians from Kaohsiung City decided to enhanced its network stability by establishing 1000 more APs on different areas. Moreover, they invited several computer science professors and researchers from various universities and institutions to design an artificial-intelligence based internet routing system. Consequently, the network condition of Kaohsiung City becomes much better that the past, and citizens all agree upon their government's policy. Nevertheless, the government of Miaoli County spend a significant amount of money on public transportation. Unfortunately, only a few people use those facilities. As a result, the government received an extremely notorious reputation for wasting money on facilities that their citizen do not use regularly. Hence, it is clear that providing internet access to people can help the government gain a positive image.

Last but not least, a stable internet access can better guarantee citizen's safety. For instance, suppose a citizen passed out when he was hiking on a remote mountain, and the region provided people a steady internet for them to use. Then, this his partner can call 911 or the rescue team instantly after the accident happened. Similarly, if a man found out that his house is on fire, and his family was still in the house. Then, he could use his cellphone to text his family and told them to escape the house before the fire went out of control. In short, a convenient network access can guarantee people's safety. However, if no internet is presented in that region, people who run into unfortunate accidents cannot reach out to their families or the rescue team in time, and in the worst case, they might lose their life.

In conclusion, I maintain that the government should allocate more budget on providing a steadier and more advanced internet access, because the government should focus on saving its money, getting a positive reputation, as well as making sure that its citizen is safe.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2858.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33208955224 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98973283931 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6593711427 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.32 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.44 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.48 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253515179242 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718343940714 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639643629719 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151635356488 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592097269583 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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