Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is often not a good thing for people to move to a new town or country because they lose their old friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Indubitably, a big number of people immigrate every year. Accordingly, some move to new town or countries for different purposes. In this context, some people believe that it is better not to move to other places because of loosing old friends. However on the other hand, some people subscribe to the idea that there are some great benefits in immigration. I for one, concur with the latter argument. I hold this position based on a twofold rationale, which I shall expound upon in the ensuing discourse.
To commence with, with the developed technology in this modern world, communication is much easier all around the world. To be more concrete, the video calls and internet make it easy to see each other and feel close while people are in distanced cities. Moreover, it is important to consider that, it is not like older times that people had to send letters only or have short expensive voice calls. consequently, friends can send voice messages to each other or make video calls with high quality and with a very low price. My own personal experience serves as a highly compelling and noteworthy illustr4ation of this. I moved from Tehran, Iran to Boston Massachusetts in the United States abut three years ago. I expected to loose touch with some of my friends. Despite, I could keep my contact with them and we see each other every often through video calls.
Another key point to consider is that moving to a new town is a great opportunity to make new friends. To put it in a more vivid picture, Seeing new people is a subsequence of moving to a new place and it could lead to new friendships. Again, my personal experience serves as a compelling testament to support this assertion. When I moved to Boston, I rent a new apartment and started a new job. As a consequence, I had new neighbors and colleagues. As a case in point, after a couple of months, I had many new friends from different places. Had I not moved to Boston, I would have not had these new amazing friends.
In summary, after carefully considering all the aforementioned arguments, I am firmly convinced that moving to a new city or country is not a bad thing in manner of losing old friends. It is because not only does technology helps being in touch easily, but also people can make new friends in new place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: lose
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Suggestion: help
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, while, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65110565111 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71574249906 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5085995086 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1765056825 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3043478261 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6956521739 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226210909137 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667581294414 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489275712697 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147141007802 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394845246126 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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