Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is often not a good thing for people to move to a new town or country because they lose their old friends.
Without a doubt, old friends play an important role in individuals' lives. Some people think it is not an excellent idea for people to move to another city or country because they lose their old friends. However, others disagree with this idea. From my vantage point, moving to a new place can be more beneficial for people because they can have many new experiences and give them more opportunities. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will express in the following essay.
First of all, moving to a new town or country increases people's chance of meeting new people, and they can make new friendships in this new place which can be better than their old friendships. Moreover, nowadays, with the helping hand of technology, people can be in touch with each other all around the world and talk to their old friends when they want. For instance, a few years ago, my cousin moved to the US and abandoned her family and all her friends in Iran. In her new town, she meets many new people and finds really lovely friends who helped her a lot in the first months. Also, she is in touch with her old friends, and they are still friends like past. If she did not move because of losing her friends, she would not make new friendships.
Secondly, by moving to other cities or countries, people can improve their career and position and have higher income and a better life. Most of the people who decide to move to other places find a better job at this places which it can be beneficial for them and they not only can have better income but also can support their friends if they need them. For example, my cousin has an excellent condition in her new town, and he has a fantastic job with a high income. she always says she is pleased to move to this place and if she did not make this decision she lost this great work. Moreover, nowadays, if her old friends ask her something, she does her best and supports them better than before.
In conclusion, From where I stand, it is not logical that people stay in their hometown because of losing friends for two reasons. First, by moving to new places they can make lots of new friends and keep in touch with old ones. Second, individuals can have better life and career and high income in the new city and support their old friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: these
...ve to other places find a better job at this places which it can be beneficial for t...
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...has a fantastic job with a high income. she always says she is pleased to move to t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...new city and support their old friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44047619048 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24494771641 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435714285714 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9151544235 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1578947368 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353477458472 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134088713032 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722218548344 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272078863598 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715059378081 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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