Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Job satisfaction is more important than making a lot of money.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, working is a crucial part of life. Since we are not all born with money waiting for us to spend and we can do whatever we like. Instead, money is what we have to work to earn it. There is a concept of working on the things you like rather than the things you could earn a lot of money. In reality, the concept is just an optimistic view of how to live a life where happiness is everywhere and every time, including working hours.
The first thing that comes in mind when I think about job satisfaction versus money making is that why does making a lot of money doesn't count as a kind of satisfaction. For most people, having money is the most important factor in their life. It cannot be denied that money is everything in our developing world. We use them to feed our family, pay for our hospital, pay for educations, and many more. If I had to choose between having a satisfactory job and having a job that can make a sustainable amount of money, then I would choose the latter one.
Another reason that I disagree with the statement is that feeling is not the most significate part of work. We could have a satisfactory feeling with any other thing that does not relate to work. It is not the end of the world if the job that we do is not satisfy us. Because if I have money, then I can choose to live my life however I want to. The satisfactory feeling for me does not come from working with the right job and feel satiated with it. But to have freedom in life or freedom to choose what kind of lifestyle I can have is the most satisfying feeling that is far more important for me than to have job satisfaction.
In conclusion, I disagree with the statement because making a lot of money is more beneficial than having a satisfying job since money can be the source of satisfaction and satisfaction alone cannot make any profit except feeling good.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'concepts'?
Suggestion: concepts
...we have to work to earn it. There are a concept of working on the things you like rathe...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...is that, why does making a lot of money doesnt count as a kind of satisfaction. For mo...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tory job and having a job that can make a sustain amount of money then I would choose the...
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Message: Did you mean 'come'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: come
...he satisfactory feeling for me does not comes from working with the right job and fee...
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Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'come'
Suggestion: come
...he satisfactory feeling for me does not comes from working with the right job and fee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29577464789 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4250331046 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43661971831 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7697081093 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7058823529 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8823529412 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267279394978 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909164422703 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777549400413 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19253618308 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732730487011 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.66 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.32 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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