Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe that competition discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own and explain your reasoning for your position. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address both views presented.
The statement claims that competition plays two roles on athletes; one as a catalyst to draw out young athlete potential, and the other one as a deterrent for not athletically talented athletes. It is undoubtedly true that every athlete wants victory over other participants, but in some circumstances can put one improve to claim the victory or put one out of the road.
Competitiveness can drive the performance of the athlete to its best. This circumstance can only be valid when athletes goal is to win as best as one could in the competition, and that goal drives the athlete to improve oneself to the extent to compete with other participants who have the same goal, victory. In contrast, if the athlete goal is not to win the competition, and the athlete does not have the confidence to improve, the athlete will not improve potentially.
Another circumstance, competition can be daunting to an untalented athlete. This circumstance will be in effect when the athlete does not have any wills to win the competition and lack confidence in own ability. On the contrary, this circumstance will be invalid if the athlete does have confidence in his/her ability to improve, and does not have fear in losing as experience.
In conclusion, both situations are true and act like a flip-flop to one another; the athlete with confidence will improve and join the competition while the other will be intimidated and lose hearth.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1194.0 2235.4752809 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 240.0 442.535393258 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.975 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03084834109 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 215.323595506 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479166666667 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 704.065955056 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9381190112 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22808929899 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123136818933 0.0831039109588 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749125026982 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143138369479 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547665326599 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 100.480337079 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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