Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Job satisfaction is more important than making a lot of money.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the world has placed a premium on improving the work conditions. Although a various array of people advocate solely extrinsic factors are required for the job satisfaction, others argue that both intrinsic and extrinsic factors are necessary. I profoundly argue that a combination of intrinsic and extrinsic factors are necessary for job satisfaction. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the ensuing essay.
The first reason that I should mention is that most of the factors that have influence on job satisfaction are intrinsic. Paid holidays, bonuses, housing benefits, perks, parental leave, health insurance, pension, commission, and so on are main elements an employee normally will look into when evaluating whether or not a job is desirable. For instance, staff are looking for a new occupation should consider whether or not the company offers valuable benefits. Needless to say, gone are the days when a company would offer benefits to ones who were not capable of doing plenty of jobs. Current employee has shown a tendency to recruit and to offer benefits to those jobholders who are able to perform an array of jobs. As a result, extrinsic values are oriented to versatile and jack of trade people.
Another noteworthy and exquisite reason that I could add is that intrinsic factors are also mandatory for job satisfaction. People crave for a positive self-image and outlook and to have their contribution valued and appreciated. Ones who have an optimistic self-image are more likely to achieve anything they want. Moreover, having a positive attitude toward life helps them to achieve higher job satisfaction irrespective of the job. Not only does it make them far more satisfied with their lives, but it also helps them not to get disappointed when something goes wrong. As an example, a friend of mine working in a company was suddenly made redundant. Actually, the boss announced that there is going to be downsizing all of the sudden. At that time, the company downsized its workforce by 50%. It is allayed that those blue-collar employees who had no intrinsic job satisfaction factors suffered from stress and anxiety for a while, but those staff such as my friend who enjoyed their job for the intrinsic factors easily dealt with that redundancy. As a result, if people attend a job for its intrinsic values, the prospect of not being satisfied with demanding situations and obstacles significantly reduces.
By and large, both intrinsic and extrinsic factors should be intended when it comes to choosing a job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...normally will look into when evaluating whether or not a job is desirable. For instance, staff...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ng for a new occupation should consider whether or not the company offers valuable benefits. N...
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Line 5, column 723, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE_SUDDEN[1]
Message: This phrase is nonstandard. Did you mean 'all of a sudden'?
Suggestion: all of a sudden
...ed that there is going to be downsizing all of the sudden. At that time, the company downsized it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, while, for instance, such as, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1380952381 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83573727551 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530952380952 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3768124537 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.761904762 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101160149724 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0301191608197 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033373447678 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551111269252 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326006195601 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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