Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The knowledge we gain from personal experience is more valuable than the knowledge we gain from books.
No one can deny that books considered one of the most important resources for knowledge. You may find two categories of people, some of them prefer to depend on books to improve themselves while the majority prefer to be more involved to achieve their goals. From my perspective, the opponent idea looks rational and in the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of view cogently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is experience. When we are involved directly in a job or work, we will have an interesting experience regardless if it is positive or negative. This kind of experience will stay in our memory for a long time because we may fail or succeed in it and both aspects considerably left an impression on our personality. I remember a result of a survey on this issue at Baghdad university, one of the prestigious universities in my country Iraq revealed that more than 70% of people believe that their benefits from books are more than books.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that entertainment. Each one when participating through a duty will feel like they get fun in addition to experience. On the other hand, when they read a book, they may feel a temporary enjoyable time which ends when they finished the book. For example, In one of the long waiting doctor appointment, I found an article about sky diving, which I always want to try it. When I read the article, I feel enthusiastic like a real experiment. Therefore, I booked in a sky diving center to try it. I can say it was one of the most exquisite experiences in my life, it was better than the way they describe it in the article.
To wrap it up, all the after-mentioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that both reading a book or participate in a real experience may supply us with new information. But reading a book could be considered a limited source of knowledge while actions in life could enhance our knowledge dramatically.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i feel, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97651565029 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543604651163 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0388287342 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.125 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14022643917 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386807693223 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046377756393 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874420168254 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583844695973 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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