Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When we think of a successful leader, what is the first concept that come to our mind? I believe most people will answer good personality, since we usually think that leadership comes naturally. However, I do not agree that leadership cannot be learned, since I believe that leadership consisted by many skills instead of just personality.
To begin with, it is true that a lot of great leaders throughout human history have strong personality. Some of them might be able to make people feel intimidated without doing anything, and others might make people feel safe so that people can count on them. For example, the founding father of Taiwan, Sun Yat-sen. He was the person that organized a lot of people to rebel the emperor of Chin Dynasty. Since he did not have any resources like weapon or money to organize the whole revolution, how could he become our founding father? I think the answer is very simple, personality. Because of the corrupted government, people in early 20th century in China had really bad living condition, lots of people died in starvation. But this man, his appearance gave those people hope, since they thought that they could rely on him. As a result, those people helped him subside the Chin Dynasty.
However, lacking special personality does not necessarily mean that we cannot become a successful leader, since becoming a good leader requires more skills instead of only personality. So we still can acquire leadership through training and learning. Let's take Sun Yat-sen as example. The reason that he could successfully subside Chin Dynasty was mainly because he also had a good speaking skill, that skill made people who passed by his speech be willing to hear what he was saying. Moreover, he also had to have clear thought to organize the whole mission. If he was just a disordered man, then I believe no matter how hard he tried, he would never achieve his goal- building a republic nation. And all of these skills, we can acquire from learning and training.
In conclusion, despite innate quality can help us become a good leader, without postnatal learning and practicing, no one can become a successful leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...adership through training and learning. Lets take Sun Yat-sen as example. The reason...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92602739726 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59864710677 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564383561644 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8153631438 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124482867316 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0387187660305 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465360694408 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946487967815 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561872918203 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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