Nowadays, technology is making tremendous progress. The development of science and technology is due to the convenience of people’s lives. However, is it work today? I do not think so. I think many people can not adapt to this situation. I will show you three parts, SNS, stress and destruction of the environment.
First point is SNS. These days, most people use SNS to communicate. Especially for teenagers, they use this to share their life, make a friend and chat with friends. Before the SNS spread around, many people met or called. However, for me, many times we just chat, so it feels like I am not very close with those friends. Also, in SNS, there are many people that are very rich, pretty and star. Therefore, many people compare themselves to others. Because of this, they lose their own speciality and they get tired of imitating them.
Moreover, the development of the internet is very stressful. Although, the internet has a good aspect, such as plentiful information and communication with people from various nations. However, after we know about too much information, we have many things to consider or pay attention to. For example, in the past, we just thought about our village news, but now we should think about world problems. There is a saying “Ignorance is medicine”. I think it is true in our lives.
Lastly, the technologies are destroying the environment as well as the humans. The biggest problem is air pollution. It is not only bad for the environment but also for human lungs. As the technologies develop, the number of cars is increasing. Another example is the smartphone. This electricity device causes global warming and these electromagnetic waves can be hazardous to the human body.
Of course, technology brings us convenience, but it also has such a bad effect. Like Entropy law, if there are advantages to our, it must have disadvantages too. Thus, we should keep in mind that development has pros and cons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...people can not adapt to this situation. I will show you three parts, SNS, stress ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, of course, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95468277946 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85802520385 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1771194314 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.5517241379 100.406767564 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.4137931034 20.6045352989 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.8275862069 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0456025688597 0.236089414692 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.013388357094 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0240253951537 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0231134469914 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0188506302701 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.25 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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