Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary era, there are various kinds of manufactories with different products across the world that want to sell their products as large as possible in scale so as to not fall behind their rivals. In order to get to this point, advertisement is one of the best ways to be used. Now, there is a controversial question as to whether this selling method demonstrates some unreal facts about that specific good or not? Although some people are an opinion that these shows are real without any lie, Personally, I totally believe that factories exaggerate their products' quality in the advertisements because of several reasons, both of which will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the fact that some companies are aware of the quality of their products, and they know if the consumers know about it, they will not be able to get enough revenue from the products. So the first option that they have is nothing but making a stunning advertisement. While some people are totally aware of this trick, there are numerous individuals who are affected by these kinds of shows. But most of them will be regret when they get that particular device and use it for a short time. To shed more light on this matter, I am going to mention my own experience regarding this fact. When I was a kid, there was an attractive toy which was shown in all of TV channels in my country. I was eager to have one of those, so I push pressure on my parents to buy one. Although my father told me that toy, a remote control car, would not be as same as what I saw on the TV, I cried many times to convince them to buy it. After lots of arguments, my father bought that car for me. When I started to play with it, I recognized it was not what I thought and my parents were right about it. So I was angry why they showed unreal picture of their remote control car on TV.
Secondly, these days with the advent of technology, most of the factories use some computer effects in their advertisment in order to make it more attractive for viewers. Makers of these type of clips try their best to show their ability in their career and because of that we see many commersial show on the TV in which there is a products unsimilar to its origin. Somehow this difference between the main good and the thing that we see in advertisemnet is not the producter facroty’s fault. To illustrait my viewpoint, my father have a icecream manufactory. We have a type of icecream which is really delicious and it is like a tedy bear. As you know making an icecream looks exactly like a bear is an impossible action. In our advertisement we have cooperated with a graphist because we do not have ability regarding this matter. He makes a great advertisements for us in which he uses some graphic effects to make it more attractive. while our products looks roughly as a tedy bear, in the commercial advertisement it looks like a real bear. to sum up, some times there is a little difference between the real product and the thing that people watch on the TV or other advertisement and they are because of technological effects to make the show better.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, while we see various advertisements that show completely different thing in comparision with the real product to tempt their consumers to buy it, there is others which use some slight effects to make their show more attractive. But the inevitable fact is that we can not find an advertisement in which the product looks exactly like the origin one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... products as large as possible in scale so as to not fall behind their rivals. In order ...
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... Now, there is a controversial question as to whether this selling method demonstrates some u...
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Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are a products'?
Suggestion: there are a products
...many commersial show on the TV in which there is a products unsimilar to its origin. Somehow this d...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a product' or simply 'products'?
Suggestion: a product; products
...ersial show on the TV in which there is a products unsimilar to its origin. Somehow this d...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...illustrait my viewpoint, my father have a icecream manufactory. We have a type of...
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Line 3, column 641, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y delicious and it is like a tedy bear. As you know making an icecream looks exact...
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Line 3, column 850, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'advertisement'?
Suggestion: advertisement
...regarding this matter. He makes a great advertisements for us in which he uses some graphic ef...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...hic effects to make it more attractive. while our products looks roughly as a tedy be...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...dvertisement it looks like a real bear. to sum up, some times there is a little di...
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Message: Did you mean 'there are others'?
Suggestion: there are others
...uct to tempt their consumers to buy it, there is others which use some slight effects to make t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, as to, you know, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 94.0 43.0788530466 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2975.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 651.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56989247312 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05120793913 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71107818098 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427035330261 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 947.7 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.714144041 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.185185185 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161143949665 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464979595292 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395296676516 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106959975727 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037060492714 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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