Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Thanks to the rapid growth of technology, businesses prosper in the progress of reaching their desired goals. With no doubt, they try to grab people's attention through technology, and one of their methods is the advertisement. As far as I 'm concerned, most of the advertisements overstate about the products which are described, and unfortunately in the reality the product's quality is not accepted.
First and formost, many corporations are using the advertisments as a brain-washing method which by use of it, their audiances uncounsiously will buy their products. Consequently, the consumers will have numerous unnecessary purchases that hardly ever they use them. Likewise, due to the exagerations made in the advertises, most of the times consumers are not satisfied by the quality they expected. As an illuatration, take one of the well-known smart phones brand, as an example. The respective company advertises about their phones, and as a moto, the battery lives are mentioned all the time. Though, if a person has one of their product, will know that how this phones' batteries are terrible. The batteries are inflating after short period of use, which is endanger the person's life. This example demonstrates how the advertisments boastfully depict the commodities.
What's more, if a product has a noticeable quality, people will talk about in their gatherings which would be a kind of a true advertisement. Henec, consumers will encourage the other person to buy that specific product. In this case, a high level qualified commodity won't need any commercial advertisement to promot it. For instance, Apple corporation is very successful in selling their smart phones because their product has a very incredible quality and within a family, in case of having one of their phons, the other members will buy the same brand as well.
To recap, I firmly believe that most of the advertisements show higher quality of a product which basically is not true. It is the logic of the advertises' use that grab people's attention to buy a specific product. Moreover, if a product has an effective performance, the other people will be encouraged to have that one, without watching or hearing any advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, likewise, moreover, so, well, for instance, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17597765363 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1042971573 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527932960894 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1942812713 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.944444444 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143129014054 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546062084855 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410736206131 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101408026688 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300621085725 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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