Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With no doubt, society need both artists and athletics. Some people hold the negative perspective toward any help from government for athletics, while others believe that Olympic teams need more support than artistes. I subscribe to this group and I think athletes require more attention from government.
To begin with, artists usually have their own ways to earn money. The exhibitions provide a great opportunity of them to show their talent which is a start point for them to be famous and grab their partison's attention. Therefore, artists could earn money by selling their creations, or by have their related courses in institutions to instruct. Conversely, athletics don't have any chance to have their income. They devote most of their lives to become a noticeable athlete without any monetary support from society. Government should pay more attention to them and champion their team, so they could be one of the Olympic teams. In that case, they become well-kown and provided that, could raise their income as well. As an illustration, cosider the swimming team in my country, Iran. Before any support they had have from government, all member of the team were involved in monetary problems. After a while, a campain was introduced which they strived to pursuade governer to support the swimming team. Consequently, the swimming team have thrived and obtained the bronze medal, and this success would not achieved except with the governement's assistance.
Furtheremore, people have more role models among athletes than artists. Hence, they generally perefer to have successful athletics. They feel more strong when one of their favoriate sport teams prosper. In fact, for have more power and hope injection to society, government should consider to spend more money to athletics team to have more striking achivements.
To put it in a nutshell, I firmly believe that government ought to pay more attention and spend more money to athletics rather than artistsic works. The athletes hardly ever have the chance to have income except those who achive many world medals. In addition, majority of the society have their role model between athletes which is more important for them to have successful athlete instead of aritis.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, hence, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in addition, in fact, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21388888889 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60436332591 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3754047129 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.380952381 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208771931713 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712780197295 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560246900111 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145813921619 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159763258817 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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