Without any shadow of a doubt, people's relationship is interdependently meaning that they cannot live without others either for their emotional aspects or living ones. In this regard, there are problems which cannot be solved by every single person alone, meaning that the presence of an intellectual system is needed. Some people think that they can cope their problems by themselves or give some help from their friends. Others, including me, believe that there are some problems which a small group of people cannot solve them, meaning that they tend to need some structural supports for addressing. Supports for this idea are manifold, however, two of which are stated in detail hereunder.
First and foremost, the majority of people all around the world are said to buckle financial problems. Most of them do not even have enough foods to eat, let alone enjoy healthy foods. Besides, the bad news is that there are some people that have nowhere to sleep. Although solving these problems is so hard, by using practical plans as well as having a general view of society more likely to be handled. For example, as we can see in most of the world, in exchange for working for governments, there are given foods and places to live. Furthermore, governments tend to support some of these children so that they go to school and enjoy educational services. In contrast, how these people or their families can help one another to cope all financial difficulties during their lives? When someone is drowning, how can he or she keep others away from drowning?
Moreover, the problem of the handicapped is said to be an important, undeniable issue for the classes who face with. There are some concepts that should be stuck in people's minds like helping the handicapped. Some people suffer from looking after a handicapped child in their family, however, this seems to be just one aspect of the problem that these families can experience. The most suffering problem is that when they want to carry these children, other's views tend to annoy them, in fact, they may be ashamed. For the handicapped and their families to not be ashamed of people's views, governments should help them by enhancing cultural level so that these people do not be worried about what people think about them and how people behave with them. This is, in fact, because according to the psychologists, some handicapped may lose their self-confident because of these views. In addition, governments can group some handicapped with specific features together so that they enjoy some governmental supports in order to work or, at least, do not get worse. This will be great for them because by doing so, they can enjoy having some important facilities that make them live better. In contrast, people alone as well as their families, cannot concentrate helping a single person just because he or she is not like the others. While there is more than one person with physical disabilities in societies, governments can shoulder their responsibility and help them.
to sum up, with all taken into account, I do believe that although there may be some problems that people can address them by themselves or give some help from their families, there are some problems like critical financial ones and the handicapped which can be solved by small families. In fact, these problems need a general view to be tackled.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...shadow of a doubt, peoples relationship is interdependently meaning that they cannot live without others ei...
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Line 3, column 828, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'keeps'.
Suggestion: keeps
... someone is drowning, how can he or she keep others away from drowning? Moreover,...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
... their responsibility and help them. to sum up, with all taken into account, I ...
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Line 7, column 348, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lems need a general view to be tackled.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, while, at least, for example, in addition, in contrast, in fact, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2814.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95422535211 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59508714425 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44014084507 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 857.7 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9379775321 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.56 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.72 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328272525734 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102266100209 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844032034247 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234021768427 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425899865222 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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