Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
Since the dawn of time, any effort has been made by individuals in order to achieve calmness. Although the concept of calmness differs from person to person, individuals are seeking for finding it at their any moment. Meanwhile, some people think that being successful is paramount goal of any person. Others think that not being successful, but being happy after failing is more important. If we determine the happiness—which comes as a sequence of failing a person—as another meaning of calmness, in my point of view, being happy is the most important target in one person's life because of manifold reasons. Two of which are stated in details hereunder.
Without any shadow of doubt, there are few, if any, concerns that are more important than healthiness in the assessment of a good life. Consider a healthy body as a "green body" which is divided from a green leaf. In fact, the greener the leaf, the fresher the leaf is. When individuals are seeking for just success during their lives, stress tends to be an undeniable part of their body. Stress, according to the doctors, is the most poisonous element of not being healthy. Heart attack and neural diseases are the most popular sequences of having stress. On the other hand, when green body people try to keep or increase their spirits after failure, they save their energies. Therefore, they would have enough energy as a fuel of another start for their goal. Being happy, tends to let green body people to take away their concentration from their body. As a result, this kind of happiness will prevent people having diseases.
Last but, of course, not least, receiving positive waves of the law of attraction is another reason of keeping someone's happiness after failure. This a fact proved by quantum physics scientists that states, "People will receive everything they think about." Individuals who have set the success as paramount target of their lives, they will on day achieve it, however, it might be time consumer for them. When people look just the black spot in the shooting target rather that the distance of black spot form the spot which they are in, they are more prone to have a negative viewpoint about themselves. Thus, they will receive negative waves. In contrast, people who are happy after failure, seem to focus on finding how to solve the problems, so, they will find them because they have concentrated on that. In fact, they will receive "problem solving" waves. In addition, they know that they have made all the efforts, so they can convince themselves to be calm rather than being nervous. As a result, these people will receive calmness waves as well. Imagine that the combination of these two positive waves what an unbeatable can be.
To sum up, with all taken into account, I believe that it is more important to be happy after failure. Healthiness and receiving the positive waves are two reasons mentioned above for this viewpoint. In this regard, I hope that people one day come to conclusion that focusing on this kind of happiness has a more positive effect on the way of achieving their goals rather than focusing on only the main goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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...eive 'problem solving' waves. In addition, they know that they have made...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, in contrast, in fact, kind of, of course, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9328358209 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58920542647 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496268656716 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8985613729 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4285714286 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353463358784 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897533937184 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709508269513 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210289742706 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539644468951 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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