Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
In our mundane life that we have a lot of mental disruption around ourselves just being happy in every situation is very vital for our mind and body. There are varies types of diseases coming from pressures that we have stood through our life. In my point of view no matter what occurs, in the end, our destiny in life should just be happy and blessed in our every weekly frequency. I have two reasons for my view that are clarified in the following paragraphs.
My first and main reason is that we could earn such a valuable experience through failure besides feeling blessed and happy. I recognize lots of craft people were not successful in their early tries but after a while, they became successful and also happy due to this familiar quote that says at the end who seek shall win. Let illuminate it with one example, imagine that you just want to win and become successful in one project base on your knowledge, therefore without any tries and just on your own feet, you become successful. Now imagine that you are in a situation that is very challenging; In addition, that occasion needs lots of practical skills to be concluded; although you try hard, you could not handle the project and fail. In this case, because the plentiful experiences earning, feeling of happiness and delight comes to you besides you never feel sad anymore.
The latter reason that I bring is that it is our choice to be happy or depressed. We should ask ourselves whether or not it is worth to become frustrated just because of not being succeeded. In our hectic life, we should find ways for a joyous lifestyle. Statistics show that people who are happy in every situation are even more successful in the near future. So instead of sitting and crying it is better to standing and trying, in this way we could gain a lot of energy for being successful in our latter try.
To make a long story short it does not matter whether we gain or goal or not, what matters is that pleasure and feeling cheery in every aspect of our life. I highly suggest that man focus on his destiny, not a success and always be happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52894736842 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37917296322 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518421052632 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0350124209 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5625 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163118606812 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563679060547 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366657347816 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950404570695 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367878081814 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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