Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
In this competitive world of today, as it is commonly sensed, success and failure are inseparable parts of human race's life. With this in mind, a debate exists as to whether success plays a vital role in human’s life or defeat. Some people may hold the view that success is the most paramount factor in their life, while others are in an exactly opposite view that when they fail, they should be happy. Were I ask to give my point of view about this issue, I would definitely agree with the latter view on some reasons. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my standpoint with two conspicuous reasons.
The first and foremost reason is that there is a direct link between one’s progress and experience, and experience is the fruitful product of the failure. The more experience people have, the more they will be success in the future. Nobody doubts that thanks to every failure, people find a new way that will not bring them closer to their desired goal. In this regard, a saying comes to my mind, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this, “That which does not kill us makes us stronger.” Which helps us to depict the value of being optimistic in failing which makes individuals can start over many times with more experience and do their future task flawlessly.
Another salient reason touching on my standpoint is that people who think they should be successful every time cannot tolerate mental pressures and keep their self-confidence in facing difficulties --particularly in the unpredicted situation— thereby leading them such psychic problems as losing concentration. On the contrary, people who are optimism and passionate in the face of problems try and try over 1000 times to reach their “Golden Dream”. As an illustrator, consider Edison who did not lose his hope in realizing his dream, and finally he could deal with various problem and register the bigger invention of the world, the bulb, on his name. Therefore, maintaining happiness in failures can be named as a panacea in ups and downs during the path of achieving the goal.
As a consequence of aforementioned reasons and examples, it is crystal clear that by the virtue of accepting flaws as steps in the path of succeeding, people can taste the sweet fruit of success perfectly. Last but not least, it is highly advised not to give up dreams and hopes due to the considerable impact of it on the person’s success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ife. With this in mind, a debate exists as to whether success plays a vital role in human&apo...
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Message: The proper name in singular (paramount) must be used with a third-person verb: 'factors'.
Suggestion: factors
...view that success is the most paramount factor in their life, while others are in an e...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...is the fruitful product of the failure. The more experience people have, the more t...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... concentration. On the contrary, people who are optimism and passionate in the face of ...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... and passionate in the face of problems try and try over 1000 times to reach their &apo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94202898551 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81392983652 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570048309179 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.9198319118 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.4 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316852245299 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907686471407 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706423222356 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16056491628 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645908344439 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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