TPO45:
In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better to able to make decision about their own lives.
We are living in a day and age in which youngsters are pillars of the nation, therefore, decision-making about their lives is very critical. With this in mind, a debate exists as to whether or not today’s young people have the ability of making decision without any dependency on their parents. Were I ask to give my point of view about this issue, I would definitely agree with this statement on some reasons. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my standpoint with two conspicuous reasons.
The first and foremost reason is that thanks to development of human modern society and breathless space flourishing in science and technology, today’s generation can make decision independently. Conspicuously, youths can foster their information and skills by using Internet, state-of-the-art implement, and educational books in wide variety of aspects of life. Such a great situation will assist the youths to gain their needed factors for making new decisions. In this regard, a saying comes to my mind, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this, “modern society make today’s young as a God,” which helps us to depict the differences between youngsters’ abilities in now and the past. That is to say, in the last century, children did need their parents in order to consulting about their financial, economic, educational issues, and so forth, due to low level of public information and lack of well-educated persons. Therefore, today’s generation, in comparison with the past one, are more capable to make decision about their own lives.
Another salient reason touching on my standpoint is that today’s parent set priority over children’s satisfaction and never expect their children to fulfill the parents’ expectation. As a result of this fact, children gain more self-confidence in independent thinking – without any interference from their parents—for their lives. Conspicuously, it is not true that the old youth cannot decide about themselves, however they gave great value for elder’s recommendation. Under these circumstances, the young had no choice to do whatever rules, desires of parents As an illustrator, in the past the youth did not any right in choosing their partnership in their life. They accepted everyone whom their family introduced as a proper person. Nonetheless, now, parents are the last ones who to be informed of their children’s choice as a spouse. Hence, in the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them.
As a consequence of aforementioned reasons and examples, it is crystal clear that today’s youngsters enjoy more self-confidence than those in the past. Last but not least, it is highly advised parents pay more attention to upbringing their children due to the considerable impact of it on their future life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
...cal. With this in mind, a debate exists as to whether or not today's young people have the abil...
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Line 3, column 623, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...society make today's young as a God,' which helps us to depict the differenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, as to, as a result, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39246119734 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28204437526 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552106430155 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4072634828 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399753570977 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141462375436 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154130823478 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240956643016 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08907373232 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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