TPO48:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We are living in a day and age, as it commonly sensed, life is continuously moving towards complexity. With this in mind, a debate exists as to whether or not young people can survive successfully thanks to planning and organizing abilities. Were I ask to give my point of view about this issue, I would definitely agree that careful, effective planning and organizing have a huge impact on dealing with problems of today’s life is not possible without a proper plan thanks to several reasons. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my standpoint with two conspicuous reasons.
The first and foremost, the youth period is of a great importance in terms of work and study in life. Without any shadow of doubts, complexity of study and work, in today’s world, requires young people to enjoy their resources such as time, energy, and money in an efficient fashion to acquire future success and prosperity. In this regard, a say comes to my mind, the equivalent of which in English sounds like this, “A goal without a plan is just a wish,” Which can be as an assistant to clarify the fact that by virtue of planning dreams to be realized, and goals to be conquered. That is to say, a few minutes spent for planning and designing a good timing schedule before study or work can help youngsters reduce aimless and meaningless actions, thereby improving productivity and efficiency. Hence, ability to plan and organize is a sharp, powerful weapon young people must be armed with.
Another salient reason springing to the mind is that nowadays everything goes at a breakneck pace, and there is not a great deal of time to predict and anticipate any problems may happen. Additionally, young people are powerless to make a great change or make a decision at a moment because of an abrupt happen. For instance, a young man either as a leader of a team or a member of a group should finish the work or project before the deadline. If a sudden event such as lack of resources, carelessness of an employee, and even an unintentionally mistake occurs, all their endeavor will be missed because of lacking time. While, they can reduce the haste in their action by being well planned and organized. Therefore, such capabilities helps a youth to become more considerate and responsible.
As a consequence of aforementioned reasons and examples, it is crystal clear that the fast rolling wheels of the modern world has necessitated learning how to plan and organize. Last but not least, it is highly advised to manage the priorities in study, work, and life due to the considerable impact of it on now and future of youngsters’ lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
...ity. With this in mind, a debate exists as to whether or not young people can survive successfully t...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient fashion" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...sources such as time, energy, and money in an efficient fashion to acquire future success and prosperit...
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Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...pos;A goal without a plan is just a wish,' Which can be as an assistant to clarif...
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Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('unintentionally') instead an adjective, or a noun ('mistake') instead of another adjective.
..., carelessness of an employee, and even an unintentionally mistake occurs, all their endeavor will be miss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, such as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89601769912 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90066691449 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561946902655 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.8208234672 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.176470588 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5882352941 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181819115368 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559364013687 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406513822776 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106086570648 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279184207303 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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