Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Companies should pay for employees to get a university degree.
There is an open secret that every single company is based on knowledge. It means that knowledge plays an important role in a company's successfulness. I, personally, fully subscribe the idea that companies should pay for employees to get a university degree because of manifold reasons. Two of the paramount ones are its effect in increasing the rate of efficiency and control their rivals.
Without any shadow of doubt, the rate of efficiency is the paramount element in the assessment of a company's successfulness. Although pay for employees to get a university degree seems to waste the money at first, it tends to increase the rate of efficiency at the end. Universities teach a broad spectrum of lessons to students that prevent them being single-sighted. Therefore, if companies pay for their employees to attend the universities, companies' strategic and technical decisions will be more valid because employees have considered a wide variety of constraints. In contrast, employees with just experiences might not have any viewpoint about other aspects of the problems, so they will reduce a company's efficiency rate by making a bad decision. In addition, educated personnel are more likely to offer their company uses up-to-date technologies which have a direct result in increasing the level of production or services. On the other hand, uneducated personnel tolerate of using new technologies because they have adapted with old technologies and it is hard for them to change it let alone offer using new technologies.
Moreover, rivals have always been one of the important spots of all the companies' stresses. For a company to control their rivals, all its employees should have new distinct ideas. Companies with educated personnel especially who learns contact techniques seems to know that when they should unite with a rival in order to control other rivals and when there is their time to bloom in the market. Besides, when a company pays its employees to get a university degree, they unconsciously have let them to communicate with students in a lower age who might have a new idea about especial fields. Thus, these students, as a second-hand-investment on employees can bring new ideas for the company. This tends to make a company pass its rivals with a higher speed. In contrast, companies who do not believe that educated employees can help them improve their market share can be said that are condemned to obey what big companies order. As a result, they tend to not tolerate the changes in the market and cede their market share or their whole company to their rival.
To sum up, with all taken into account, I do believe that investing on employees to get a university degree not only can improve the rate of a company's efficiency, but it also helps the company control its rival. These two features are fruits worth starving for.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to contact'
Suggestion: to contact
...ducated personnel especially who learns contact techniques seems to know that when they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, as for, in addition, in contrast, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0358649789 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94278389176 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46835443038 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4697515711 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303155908883 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997190249719 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768158053723 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212763096054 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133018068717 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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