If students are required to do one of the below as requirement for their final semester before their graduation, which of these two would you prefer?
a. Complete a research project on a topic and write a paper on it
b. Work as an intern in a company to gain professional experience Use reasons and examples to support your position.
Since the dawn of time, any effort has been done so that people can make better as well as joyful lives. One of the paramount issues that have an earth-shaking effect on people's lives is the way in which people act while they are university students. There is a great number of stuff that students can do during their educational years in order to learn how to start their real life, beginning after graduation. Among which, courses that should be taken apart from their main courses are of great importance. In this regard, were I to suggest to students to give whether a writing project or being an intern in a company, I would definitely recommend them to choose the latter one.
To begin with, no one can cast a shadow of a doubt on the fact that any educational endeavors are aimed at students better participate in their future careers. Universities as the rather final education contributors play an important role in this regard. Consistent with this view, if there happens a situation in which students do have the opportunity to work in a company, it will be great for their future work. In fact, they can be familiar with work environment behaviors, meaning that they can experience new aspects of real life and therefore they gradually can tear their life cocoon in which they have been lived there for a long time. On the contrary, if they do not have a work experience, it may be so hard for them to work after their graduating. This is because companies do not care about them because they have no experience, so a great number of them might be rejected by companies.
Moreover, if they work in a company, its implications on their spirits will be undeniable. First of all, they can touch real life stresses like the cost problems for even one-minute delaying, meaning that they face some problems that few of them, if any, had experienced during their educational period. Therefore, by trying to cope these problems, they can improve their spirits which is really necessary for their lives. Secondly, being students, most of them were paid pocket money from their parents, however, if they work as an intern, they may be paid some money, interpreting that they gradually can learn and be independent which improves their spirits in an upper-level. In contrast, doing a project on a course tend to make no sense about their spirits while students need an upper-level spirit when they want to start their new lives.
To sum up, with all this taken into account, I subscribe the idea that students should work in a company before their graduation as far as preparing them for their future life and improving their self-confidence is concerned. I hope one day students break some traditional beliefs about everybody should just study while they are students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...een done so that people can make better as well as joyful lives. One of the paramo...
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Line 5, column 665, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...pendent which improves their spirits in an upper-level. In contrast, doing a project on a cour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, in contrast, in fact, as well as, first of all, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80793319415 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63687627458 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488517745303 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.0923795349 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.944444444 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253607874832 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996667780726 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537420094484 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180410636874 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00960175990751 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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