Your friend has the opportunity to study in either one of two majors (fields of study). Which one of the following two types of majors do you think is a better choice and why? a) A major that would allow your friend to complete his or her studies and get a degree faster (so that your friend can start working full-time soon). b) A major that would require more years of study but is likely to lead to more and better employment opportunities and job offers in the future.
Without any shadow of doubt, choosing an appropriate field of study is of great importance, for it has a direct impact on people's lives. Some people think that they should select their field in a way in which they complete it as fast as possible in order to take a job as soon as they can, while others believe otherwise. In this regard, were I to give a piece of advice to a friend, I would definitely suggest her to choose the former idea. Supports for this idea are manifold that two of which are stated in detail hereunder.
To begin with, in my point of view, life is not a spot with an unlimited, determined line. Rather, there are lines that converge to a spot which life begins after finding the very spot. Making a best decision for choosing a better way is a chief point in order to achieve a sooner convergence. Consider people who choose their field in a way in which they graduate faster as "active people." After completing their study, Inasmuch as they are young enough, active people have a broad spectrum of opportunities to take a job, so, they can change their positions or their jobs if they no longer want to stay in. When they do so, they are more likely to find their main way of their lives, the work they desire and are born for. Therefore, they can finally come nearby their life spot, as it was said before. Other people, on the other hand, even if they find a job in that they are appreciated in meaning that it is suitable for their degree and knowledge, since they have needed a longer time to be graduated, they should work for those who are in their future line.
Last but, of course, not least, time is gold and is the paramount resource that a person enjoys. There is no doubt that being illiterate or have not enough literate will never guaranty a person's success, however, the point is to utilize the time. Active people tend to save their time in parallel with earning money, thereby they are more likely to be successful in both gaining work experiences and increasing their knowledge. In the other words, since as the time passes science is dramatically increasing, active people should adapt themselves to become successful in their jobs. Thus, working, they should read enough books related to their work meaning that they do not give up studying. In contrast, having no experience but studying, non-active people are more likely to be one-dimensional.
To sum up, with all taken into account, I, personally, do believe that it will be better for her to be an active people as far as finding her future line as soon as possible and not wasting her time is concerned. I hope one day arrives in which human beings really know that what they want in order to achieve their destiny in the exact time while they are happy and successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ins after finding the very spot. Making a best decision for choosing a better way...
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Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... in a way in which they graduate faster as 'active people.' After comple...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...t enough literate will never guaranty a persons success, however, the point is to utili...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'passes'' or 'pass's'?
Suggestion: passes'; pass's
.... In the other words, since as the time passes science is dramatically increasing, act...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, no doubt, of course, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58283433134 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46409429005 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493013972056 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9061209693 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.842105263 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3684210526 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0730352103946 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0282086565978 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284791947607 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629043804679 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477281756099 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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