Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The more money people have, the more they should contribute to charity.
It strongly depends on the definition of charity. People typically think that charity is a money which is directly given to the poor. However, in my viewpoint, it is a narrow definition of the term. The broad definition is that, charity is any kind of help--whether money or psychic, direct or indirect--which is given to any person who is needed. If we narrow the definition to just money and direct help, I don't subscribe the idea that the more money a person has, the more he or she should spend on charity. There are miscellaneous reasons, two of the paramount ones are stated in details hereunder.
Without any shadow of doubt, manufacturing is the basis on which an economy of a country is constructed. Therefore, manufacturers are the ones who have a great amount of money in their hands. According to the given assumption, if the more they earn, the more they spend on charity, there will be no money left to invest on production. Hence, instead of a group of people, the whole society will get into trouble because when the amount of production reduces as a result of giving help to charity, manufacturers should lay off workers. Thus, it might cause people suffer from psychological pressure. How this problem will be handled in the society? Besides, there will be no one to help these mass of people in the long run. In contrast, manufacturers can hire the poor as workers or whatever they deserve in order to they themselves earn the money they need. In addition, according to the psychologists, it has been proved that individuals have a better feeling about themselves when they have a job and work.
Moreover, one of the chief problem that is likely to happen is that when the rich help charity, some of the poor are prone to become lazy or inactive. That means, when a poor family is being helped by the rich, they children might fall into the habit that whether they work or not, there will be someone to get help from. Consequently, it probably leads the generation of the poor to be raised. On the other hand, if the money which is considered for charity invest on building schools and help the poor--not directly--study, it will have a better influence on the growth of a society. This is, in fact, because when they study, they will understand that the more they study, the more they can be specialized, and as a result, the more they themselves can earn money. By so doing, laziness and inactiveness will be unrooted from the society and the seed of endeavor will be sown.
To sum up, with all this taken into account, I believe that it is better for society and benefactors to help the poor but not directly and by giving the money to them. Indeed, as mentioned above, it's better for them to be helped indirectly by investing on making new jobs for them as well as building new schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in contrast, in fact, kind of, as a result, as well as, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.634 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7049961183 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5510269451 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.739130435 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7391304348 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4347826087 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23424602421 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678325561436 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797244047008 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141986724085 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674708434608 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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