Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Your job has more effect on your overall happiness than your social life does. Use reasons and examples to support you answer.
Without any shadow of a doubt, people are spending most of their time working, meaning that, in comparison with the past, they tend to have less free time to spend with others. In this regard, some people believe that social life makes a person happier than its job's circumstances, while others, including me, think otherwise. Reasons to support this idea are manifold, nonetheless, two of which are elaborated upon in detail hereunder.
First and foremost, nothing but having a high level of spirit can guarantee one's being happy. Working in a situation contradicting people's spirits can have a detrimental influence on people's lives. Therefore, if people's jobs do not match their spirits, it can be said that they hardly can be happy. Besides, behaviors of people's colleagues will affect their spirits as well. For example, if they have some argument with their boss, they might feel upset about the condition in which they are, and therefore because it might be hard for them to leave their job, its effects may influence on their spirits. On the other hand, people in their social lives can easier change their situations. For example, they can change their friends as well as their houses if they no longer want to stay near these neighbors.
Moreover, spending a great amount of their time, working, people may become under squeeze of all works tensions as well as works stresses in their either minds or bodies. Besides, if any individual has an interesting job, which provides an exciting condition for him or her, even if it needs a longer time, will have a better impact on people's happiness. I have experienced this feeling, working in an engineering office. The money paid was so meager that my father told me to give up the work, but being the work fantastic, I have hardly stopped working there. In contrast, although social life tends to have some effects on people's being happy, inasmuch as people tend to have not enough time to spend on their social lives, its benefits are not that visible, meaning that its influence on people's lives seems to be overshadowed.
To sum up, with all taken into account, I do believe that people's jobs will have a more influence on their happiness as far as its impact on their spirits and spending a great deal of time on their works are concerned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in contrast, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83585858586 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47780037421 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2011262241 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6875 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0676370131131 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269283670594 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288624019173 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0593355615316 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281454959041 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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