Increasingly, robots and computers are being used to do work that humans once had to do for themselves. Some people believe the effect of this change will be mostly positive and helpful for humans. Other people believe that robots and computers will take too many jobs away from humans who are currently paid to do them. Which view do you agree with and why?
I personally think that it is better for the people to make use of robots and computers because of two reasons. First, Resource constraints are one of the most problem we have been facing with for years, so people have to handle the resources in a way in which they maximize their use of the minimum facilities. Second, exploiting robots and computers can bring more convenience for the humans.
Let's suppose robots and computers as electronic humans. One of the reasons which electronic humans are suggested to be used is that they tend to prevents of wasting resources; time and money are the most important ones among which. In comparison with the human beings, electronic humans are claimed to do more woks than humans do at an equal time, so it is logical that people have electronic humans done their chores and by doing so, they will have more time to spend on vital jobs. In addition, money is not unlimited as well. One the most popular psychologists, Dr. Shariati has illustrated that: "The performance of the people usually depends on their mood—whether they are happy or not." Accordingly, in sensitive situations not being in a good mood may cause the probability of the errors and consequently the costs increase. Therefore, using electronic humans are highly recommended because they are more economical.
The other reason is, humans may think that they may have no chance in the competition with electronic humans for having a job, however, in my opinion there will be no different from the past in the humans' working. Kinds of the jobs have just been altered by electronic humans since they have been invented. For example, people had to send all their paper mails by pony expresses, but they can easily be send by e-mails. Letter carriers had to focus on watching mails, delivering mails to the very person whose mail is carried and etc., so, any possible mistakes might took place, but after the e-mails have been generated, jobs like maintaining computers, coding and etc. have been created as a result. Generally, jobs become more specialized since then. Specialization is believed to bring more comfort for human being. In the health fields for instance, statistics showed that risks of surgical operations significantly have been decreasing by using electronic humans. Besides, specialization brings about prosperity of humans' talents which makes a person to have a better feeling in his/her life because they have realized that they can be useful for the society and themselves. In contrast, where jobs are more general—in the absence of electronic humans—people are condemned to work from morning till night without any time to even think what the comfort is.
As mentioned above, it can be concluded that using electronic humans won't take any jobs away from humans. Rather, humans in company with electronic humans can both prevent of wasting resources and make jobs to be more specialized, so people won't lose their jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04887983707 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74417680632 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505091649695 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.2885162183 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.047619048 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.380952381 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275903305643 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092598507737 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653193859596 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185642595783 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388934760995 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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