Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Without any shadow of doubt, movies and television have undeniable effects on people's lives. By considering the way of using them, the amount of their negative and positive effects will be different. However, I, personally, subscribe the idea that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. These effects are stated in details hereunder.
In one point of view, young people can learn a wide variety of subjects from movies and television. For instance, they can be taught how to have a healthy life by watching the health TV programs. Therefore, according to psychologists, inasmuch as their body is healthy, they tend to have a better intellectual system, and as a result, their behaviors seem to be better. In addition, some psychologics TV shows as well as family shows can build the concept of some moral values for the youth. This will directly influence on the way of young people behaviors. Moreover, some scientific movies and political TV shows is said to increase people's knowledge which the youth are not an exception in this regard. Thus, when young people talk with their peers, inasmuch as they have enough information to talk about, it will make them behave in a self-confident manner.
In another point of view, movies and television might have destructive effects of young people's behaviors. Consider these two media as "artificial tools." Artificial tools can be said to want to inculcate something in the mind of the youth, who will one day be as key members of the society. Therefore, the young are unconsciously spent their time in a way that artificial tools want rather than the true way they are born for. Besides, the majority of artificial tools' actors tend to have a unique intelligence as well as a strong body so that they can act like a hero. The youth, who are full of energy and imaginary power, are likely prone to think that in order for them to be an important person, just they have to have these especial abilities. Therefore, they might become frustrated at the end, for their abilities have some restriction. This frustrating might cause them give an inferiority complex, so they will act aggressive with others.
To sum up, with all taken into account, I do believe that movies and television are like a double-edged sword, but its negative effects outweigh its positive ones as far as its destructive influence on the young's minds and causing them behave aggressively is concerned. I hope one day the youth understand how to balance their time which want to spend on artificial tools, so that they enjoy both the positive aspects of a these media and keep themselves from being influenced by their harmful effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'unique intelligence'.
Suggestion: unique intelligence
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95860566449 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77198336224 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483660130719 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.399695692 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.95 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308057735816 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114344856826 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13379542251 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232617887396 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166274281455 0.0645574589148 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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