Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Altough some people adamantly claim that programmes and movies shown in the television have more destructive effect on oyung persons, others take an opposite point of view. As far as I am concerned, most of the TV programmes have positive effects. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, there is a myriad of programmes which have educational value and some of them are related to the lessons which youngsters study in the school. There are a plenty of channels which sould direct us to different worlds like discovery channel or national geographic documetaries which shown from related channels. So it would be an individual choice to watch what programm. For example, I can remember when I was a high school student, I had a project for my biology class about the harsh environment in which some animals live and their adaptation for that situation. It was so hard for me since I knew nothing about this issue and found a few amount of information in the library. I aske my teacher to help me doing this task and he directed me watching some documentary films in the television. Thanks to the television, I could do my job in the best way and got the best grade in the class. This experience thought me that TV could help us learning something like the issue I mentioned.
Second, even most of the intertaining shows and some movies convey an educational message and try hardly to enhance some positive behaviors in the society. Not all the funny programmes and standup comedies, but most of them send some messages to their viewers. For instance, there is a night late show which is shown weekly in my country. The people who are acting in this show laughene people and at the same time they critics some behaviors that is so common in my society. They notified people to inform them how terrible these behaviors are. I think that when young persons watch such shows they will find out how to behave in the society in the best way.
All in all, it seemed to be unfair if we undermined the importance of television programmes because of a little violent movies. TV has had a positive influence on the community, specially adolescents, because not only there is a plenty of channels which produced educational programmes, but also even in funny programmes you can find an attemp to sending a moral message. I would suggest to critics to be honest and give further importance to TV.
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to learn' or 'learn'.
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'movie'?
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... programmes because of a little violent movies. TV has had a positive influence on the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67906976744 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65208470303 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523255813953 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1673615968 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112735992237 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341062081505 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407595533249 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839303235362 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711258403868 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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