Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Debating on the potential effects of TV on children is one of the most controversial topics between scientists and even common people. Annually many books and articles are published to deal with it, which is a sign of the subject's importance. Some people are of the opinion that TV Movies are a good way for children to fill their time. Personally, I believe that it's negative effects are more than it's benefits; furthermore, the subject is more sophisticated than it shows. I feel this way for three main reasons, which I am going to explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, most of the movies shape bad habits in young people's lives; the hidden advertisements in these sorts of products, direct children and youth to shape their lifestyle based on the big companies' profits. For example, some days ago, I watched a movie, which in that first actor occasionally smoked a special brand's cigarette. Clearly, they had put a special brand's name in joint with a cool guy to send a subtle signal to the viewers' minds; if you want to be seen as a cool person, smoking with this brand cigarette is a good way for you! In such cases, as young people make their decisions based on emotions, easily they will be deceived by such indirect messages.
The second, TV programs are capable of distracting students' focus from books and arts. Students by watching adverse series and films waste their time; in turn, eventually, their scores' level will decrease. Books and arts help us to deal with the immaterial side of our life, help us to be calmer, and energetic; In a nutshell, being far from those could cause some troubles for children's health. To be more specific, for instance, my little brother experienced a period of time that his learning quality was reduced significantly; also, he was depressed. Based on the psychological test, the reason was obvious; they told our parents: " The boy's mind is busy with a lot of unrelated materials, these materials exhausted him, and it is because of watching TV for a long time".
Finally, sitting for a long time in front of the TV without minimum movements arouses some problems like overweighting. Based on many reports, near 35% of extra weights in youth directly pertinent to watching TV; additionally, researchers state that the children that spent more time with the TV have less desire for gym and sportive activities with respect to normal people.
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Suggestion: subjects'; subject's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88861985472 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71134766782 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576271186441 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.3301421077 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.6 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5333333333 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142633236909 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458557186118 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459912726901 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883095409697 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557330746077 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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