Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
times New Roman", serif;">there is a debate among people on whether television and movies have more negative effects than positive effects on the young people behaviour. In my opinion, movies and television have adverse effects on the behaviour of youngesters. that is due to, less social activity, and not geeting enough exrcise and styaing at home lots of the times. I will delve into the most important reasons of mine in the following paragraphs.
times New Roman", serif;">First and foremost, there are always worries about young people who spend their times to watch movies and televisions, that not being in touch with the outdoor world enough. In other words, movies and television take most of their valuable time which they can spend with their friends. it can adversely affect their social relationship. take an adolescent for instance who spent his time just on watching television and movies. In this way, he would not be able to boost his social skills and being in touch with his friends. furthermore, not spending time in society with other people and youth and just being home is very harmful for him. Consequently, he will have some problems with his community or other people in the future when he grow up. More importantly, this kind of lifestyle would make him sick mentally, and make him depressing and despondent because of being alone at home.
times New Roman", serif;">Second, spending a lot of time on television and movies have some adverse effects on young people’s health physically. Alternatively stated, youngesters who just watch television and movies, will not be able to get enough exercise. Accordingly, just sitting at home and watching television and movies will give them more weight. thus, they are fatter, and not healthy physically too. my personal experience is a good exmale of this. when I was seventeen years old, I used to watch television a lot. I spend most of my time at home, sitting on a couch or chair watching television and movies. After a while I got some weight and was not in a good shape at all. To some extent I had a little sugar blood, and have a lot of body fat. All in all, I was not in a really good situation physically. thus, this situation had negatively affected my mind too, and I was mentally ill.
times New Roman", serif;">Based on aformentioned reasons, it can be concluded that television and movies have negative effects on the youngesters’ behaviour. that is because, they reduce the youth social activity. furthermore, they have some bad effects on young people physically. Bacause, in this way, they do not spend their time to doing some outdoor activity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, thus, while, for instance, kind of, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07399103139 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15251181642 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452914798206 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7292862787 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8148148148 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5185185185 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03703703704 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226038769409 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064660042705 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747807658668 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17716792105 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820506966076 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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