Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to modernization of various novel technology, more and more movies and television serials are being cast. In my opinion movies and televisions have huge impact on young people and I believe that they are negatively effecting them for few reasons which I will explain below.
First of all, watching movies and televisions have negative impact on health of children. Kids loves to watch cartoon and other TV serials, which they tend to watch for long hours. Many of them have affected their eyes and also, leading to obesity because of lesser physical activities. For instance, my neice and nephews are teens and they binge watch televisions for almost 4 to 5 hours. As a result of this, both of them have very poor eye sight and also they weigh more than what we used to during our teenage days. They hardly listen to her parents and despite of giving them hard punishment, after few days they return back to their habits. Thus, this example demonstrattes how the movies and televisions makes kids extremely lazy and effect their health.
Secondly, children are in the stage of learning and they are always eager to learn new things thus, movies can teach them multiple things which they shouldnot learn before the certain age. Most often children after watching a violent movies, they can easily pick up those behaviors and implement them in real life. For example, I have noticed a sudden change in the behavior of my nephew, he became more grumper and short temper and always ready to handfight with his friends, few days later on i came to know that he had been watching a lot of action and viokent movies with his friends during play date.Accordingly, it has tremendiously affected his behavior. Had he not been watching action movies, he wound not have learnt false behavior.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that movies and televions have negative impacts on children because it can lead to unheathy habits like laziness and because it can tech them bad behaviors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88790560472 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50193058131 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569321533923 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7956018628 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.357142857 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168191229231 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663341448659 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656262194979 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119872028082 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775288009333 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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