Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Though Television is a modest invention, its influence, and impact is predominant on young people. I disagree with the statement that television and movies have a negative role in many young people because as far as I know, I saw a lot of improvement in the behavior of the students to whom I teach and they also spread the positive world around them whenever it is plausible. Such kind of positive behavior illustrations can be seen as follows.
Firstly, if the students get to see any negative impact from the movies they tend to realize and they will learn the situation so that they don't behave badly in their life. For instance, my sister wanted to watch a movie and when she did the movie but didn't conclude the way she expected and it turned out a lesson for her that she doesn't it in her life. Likewise, young people learn lessons from movies and television.
Secondly, young people get benefits from television and can easily locate the events they want to go to. For example, my nephew always interested in doing volunteering works and she searched a lot on the internet and also asked through people but didn't succeed in her work. However, when she was watching television all of a sudden an advertisement popped and showing all plausible volunteering hubs nearby her location. she was the most excited girl at that time. This is how television helps young people to find their interesting work event locations.`
Finally, many job advertisements can be seen through television and also in the promotion of advertisements before the start of a movie. In my daughter's case, when we went to a movie she saw an advertisement relate to a research job position at a university. she was overwhelmed by this opportunity which she was looking for a long time. This shows us that advertisements through media has always a positive impact on young people.
Therefore, I conclude that the media helps young people to choose the right path, to find the event location or to get an opportunity at wherever they are interested in. Almost, many young people are glad to say that television and movies are teaching, showing, giving opportunities to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85175202156 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84639947291 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501347708895 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1056307834 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1875 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175166195563 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625831590292 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048923697321 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106977523927 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046703140579 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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