Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The movies and television can affect societies, especially the young audience. I believe that they have a positive effect on them as they entertain them, which consequently will help them to relax. Moreover, some television programs are educational and can teach the young about particular topics.
Firstly, I think television and movies are one of those entertainments, which have potent positive effects on the brain of their audiences. The joy they receive during a show will release hormones that are associated with happiness. Besides that, the programs and shows can help the audiences to have a peaceful mind while they are watching them. As a result, they can feel energetic and fresh afterward. I have a compelling experience with this. Most of the time, when I feel exhausted or sad, I will watch an episode of a series called "Friends." After watching even one episode, I will feel energetic and motivated. The show definitely can bust my productivity during the rest of the day.
Secondly, I believe some television and movies are more than amusement. They can educate young people on a variety of topics. As the shows are more appealing to most people compared to the traditional method of educations like books, they can be more successful in delivering new information to them. Most of the time, young people spend hours watching television without noticing the passing of time. As a result, if the television program has educational content, the audience will consciously or unconsciously grasp the show's message. As young people become well-informed, they will become more successful. That will also help them to flourish in their future job. For instance, when I was in high school, I was into a sci-fi show on the television. The show was about astronomy, and the script of the show talked about comets and other celestial phenomena. By watching that show, I have learned what the theory of general relativity is and how mass can affect space and time.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that television and movies have positive effects on how young people behave and their understanding of the universe. The shows and films can help them to relax and become calm. Additionally, the shows can educate them on particular topics which otherwise they won't have the opportunity to learn about.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shows'' or 'show's'?
Suggestion: shows'; show's
... consciously or unconsciously grasp the shows message. As young people become well-in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04947916667 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90767657453 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471354166667 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9727790275 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3043478261 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6956521739 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169374618841 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06152598486 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687545555809 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128926434381 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272048244494 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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