Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the modern era, the growth of technology has brought about not only convenience but also some functional devices meant to meets our needs such as televisions. There is no doubt that televisions entertain people more successfully with their more fascinating movies. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus is about the effects of televisions on people's behavior. Opinions are divided into whether this device has a positive effect on humans, or it takes a drastic toll on humans' moralities. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that watching movies these days contributes to various misbehaviors. To support this there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, as adolescents and teenagers are included most of the television's audiences, also they are vulnerable enough to ruin their life and future. In other words, youths might be inundated with dangerous information or some violent scenes which inappropriate for them. As a result, they try to imitate what they are watching, such as the way of speaking or acting an actor presented in a movie. Take my personal experience as a compelling example of this, a couple of years ago, when I was a freshman student living in a dormitory, it was a movie describing people's life after their death. One of my classmates got into that movie and was so impressed with all ins and outs of that. In consequence, four days later, her corpse was found in a bath with her last letter about her purpose, which was “seeking a new life." It was unbelievable grief for all the students, faculties, and managers.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that excessive TV watching is a dormant activity and not only makes youths' mind stagnant but also they become addicted to movies; therefore they squander their time and vibrant energy which lead to aggravating situation and get behind their daily schedule or even exams. For instance, I used to watch movies recklessly that I failed in some of my courses and lost the great opportunity of being a top student.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that televisions have an adverse effect on young people's demeanor. The fact that the rate of imitating abysmal behavior increases, coupled with their precious time, is more valuable than watching is the reason which strengthens my claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'meet'.
Suggestion: meet
...t also some functional devices meant to meets our needs such as televisions. There is...
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Line 2, column 811, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
...ast letter about her purpose, which was “seeking a new life.' It was unbelie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in summary, no doubt, such as, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94902912621 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81766219365 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575242718447 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.169209546 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4375 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181873463425 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598151112056 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048333471032 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115174835617 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639030046922 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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