Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Watching television is among the most popular leisure activities in the world today and in many homes it is considered as a good friend. Some people believe that watching tv and movies is only a waste of time, while others believe that this can broaden one’s horizons. Personally, I believe that the negative effects of watching Tv on individuals, especially young people is much more than its positive effects. The reasons why I feel this way are explored in the following essay.
To begin with, television and movies provide the society with a lot of negative role models, which many young people are willing to imitate. These days, the so called “anti-hero” is a big part of popular culture. This is a type of character who acts badly around other people, ignores the society’s rules and has a really misanthropic attitude. Usually this character promotes excessive use of violence and drug use. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, a close friend of mine became a huge fan of these characters. While she started high school as a straight-A student, she later began to watch lots of films, which gave him the impression that taking drugs and fighting with her classmates was a more desirable behavior. As a result, she barely finished high school and is now unemployed. Moreover, she is not in a good mental condition. Had she not watched so many terrible movies, she would not be in such a desparate situation today.
Furthermore, watching television for a long time is detrimental for an individual’s health. People who spend a lot of time in front of Tv, tend to engage in less physical activities. Hence, watching tv has been linked to obesity and many heart diseases. For example, last week, I read an article in a major newspaper about the children’s habit of watching movies a lot and how this habit affects their health. According to that article, research has shown that too much watching tv can increase a child’s chance of acquiring diabetes, obesity and major eye problems such as shortsightedness. Many of these health issues can be prevented by being more physically active and moderating the time spent on tv.
In conclusion, I believe that the downsides of watching tv and movies far outweigh the benefits. That’s because watching tv promotes violence and people may easily imitate what they see and because it can be harmful for one’s health.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, may, moreover, really, so, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9197080292 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80407476539 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559610705596 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.64023404 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9090909091 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6818181818 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13604109314 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404827678595 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594824082843 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08574776173 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635360765188 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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