Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can cast doubt on the role of media such as televesions and its programs on one's life. The controversial question which arises here is whether, the negative effects of televisions and movies on young people are more than their possitive effects. I believe that movies can be considered as a bad factor which shape young people's behavior. To support this there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost , the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that it is a common approach in making movie among director that add some sexual scenes to make the movie more attractive. Expoturing with these scenes at early age bring about some sexual disorder for young people, so they face some mental health problem. As an illustration, take my personal experience; 5 years ago, when I was a teenage, I was not familiar with the relationship between partners and the way they make love. One day, I was watching move in which I faced a scene of a man and woman's relation which was very awful for me. For 2 months after that situation, I was complex and it brought a certain degree of depression for me, which I prefered to spend my time alone and thinking about what I saw.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that sould be taken into account is that most of the movies do not consider young people as their audience. Some of the context such as violent and fighting in moveis may be inappropriate for youngsters who their personalities have not formed yet. For example, an adolescent who spend most of his time wathcing violent movie, may adopt violence behavior.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that movies negative effects are more than their possitive effects on youngsters. The fact that they may contain some inappropriate contents for young people and cause some problems for them, coupled with effects of the movies on shaping their peronality in a wrong way, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, for example, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79310344828 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66587153549 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1129317307 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.142857143 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209553929316 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801979064605 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084987613453 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145876733031 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821572414757 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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