Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Lots of people spend their leisure time at watching television and movies. Doing these activities might make people get some relaxations, but also brings some negative influences to young people behavior. In my opinion, I believe that movies and television have more bad effects on young people. I feel this way by having two main reasons which I will explore in my following essay.
To begin with, young people doesn't have mature mind to judge things right or wrong. To be more specific, young people will imitate the violence and erotic plots or advertisements which needed for the dramatic scenes in movies and TV programs. Take my friend, John, as an example, when he was in junior high school, there were a sansastional movie at that time. Everyone loved that movie so much, no matter what your age are. John began to emulate the charater who was the boss of the gang in that movie. In this case, John learned how to smoke and drink alchol which was illegal at his age. Everyone in our class thought he was stupid instead of being cool. After ten years, John got the disease of addiction to alcohol and passed away when he was 25 years old.
Secondly, movies and television might change one's perspective of things. Enormous information on the TV shows are not accurate or even misleading. If young people keep watching television programs which provide lots of incorrect knowledge, young people might form a wrong view or sence of the world. For example, one of the candidates buys the wrong news that shows on the TV programs everyday, saying about others candidate's bads. This might make the voter who previous support the others candidate turning to support the candidate who buy the news. The election might not be impartial and the voters mind had be changed by the television programs.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that movies and television bring more negative effects on the young people behaviors. Not only because young people lack of the correct judgement, but also the movies and television might change one's perspective and concepts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90571428571 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46531034599 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562857142857 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5444828294 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.85 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24498158464 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747842705069 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784741851887 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172616987418 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852857614572 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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