Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Behaviors play a major role in our society. They represent the way we interact we each other and the way we affect our surroundings as a whole. Some people support the idea that movies and television would have a negative effect than a positive one on the young people; others would disagree. In my view, I believe that movies and television are affecting children and teenagers behaviors more negatively than beneficially for two essential reasons.
First, the main reason is that movies and television shows, nowadays, increase violence within a community we live in. It will have a bad effect on our young generation's mind and their way of thinking because they are constantly vulnerable to watch violent scenes or shocking news. For example, a five years old kid in our neighborhood, recently died as he jumped from a high residential building. The scientific police officers tried to dig deeper by thinking what are the exact reasons that led this tragedic accident to happen. The first impression on the accident people had, back then, was only a normal accident happened while a kid was playing on the roof of the building. However, months later the police sociologists report indicated that there was a big chance that the boy was influenced by some cartoons that he used to watch on television. These results came after conducting several interviews with his parents and friends at the school. As you can see, the violence that our minds are exposed to on a daily basis truly has a negative impact on our behavior, especially the young ones.
Second, the other reason is that television and movies decrease the human intellectual capacities and skills. It was proven scientifically that the IQ of a human being decreases with the time by watching more and more television. For instance, the last article I read indicates in-depth this matter, where it addresses the issue by explaining that the experiment was conducted on 100 persons from different categories of a community. Basically, they had approximatively similar IQ score and they were divided into 5 groups according to the number of hours they will be exposed to watching TV. The results were unsurprisingly the same as they predicted, the most exposed group had a significant drop off of their IQ during the five years of this experiment. This taught me that television and the material that we expose our mind to can be detrimental for our mental health.
In sum, though some may oppose this idea, I genuinely think that movies and television are causing more harm than benefit in our societies. Not only will decrease our mental capacities but also it would raise the level of accidents and violence for our citizens. Governments should take radical measures by having more control and censoring objectionable materials in order to prevent
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00212765957 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79236899089 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551063829787 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6261723189 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.952380952 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190714587243 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567002244064 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686962520693 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124966389177 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697277521723 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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