Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The news represents an important pillar in our lives. we are constantly exposed and surrounded by numerous information all day long from our phones, televisions, or even just hearing people discussing around you. Some people may support the idea that knowing about events happing around the world is important, despite the fact that it is unlikely that they will affect our daily life; others would disagree. As far I am concerned, I agree that having the knowledge about certain happenings all over the world is crucial in our lives, even if it does not concern us directly for two essential reasons.
First of all, the main reason is that it raises the awareness level of our minds. Humans share one and only planet "Earth", and they are divided into a myriad of different societies and cultures and are, at some point, connected to each other. So, understanding the other part of the news in other communities does not necessarily concern you or even is the center of your intention, it is just a piece of the jigsaw of our complex and sophisticated world we live in. For example, I remember when I about ten years old, I started to build up some kind of awareness of the world around me. One day I was watching the news on a foreign channel television and I accidentally was mesmerized by a reportage about Christmas day and the history behind this Christian events. In the beginning, it did not seem the kind of subject that drag my intention because it doesn't relate to my religion but what fascinated me was the close similarities that I discovered between two completely different religions that are connected by history. It was Jesus, or may I say "Issa" as we call him in Arabic, who was the important figure in the reportage that drags my intention because the historical events were exactly the same with some nuances but overall I understood a lot of obscure things and the big picture is much clearer. As you can see, without encountering the news of other events that are not ours, we could not understand things that are related to us but for the first sight were not.
Second, it would enhance our scientific knowledge. reading diverse news would help our minds to learn and enlarge the amount of information other that we already know. For instance, when I was studying for TOEFL, I had to get myself familiarize with a lot of foreign topics from history, geography, business, anthropology...etc, of course, for other cultural and other nations than mine because simply the test was an international one that targets all cultures and all the states over the world. I started my preparation by reading a lot of newspapers that deal with foreign subjects such as the economy of America, the pollution in China, or ancient Egypt civilization. After two months, I get rid of my nightmare that I was not capable of understanding articles from different backgrounds. This experience unveils that learning more and getting more knowledge from other news than ours is extremely beneficial for us.
In sum, though some may oppose my reasoning, I genuinely believe that keeping up with the news and events happing all over the world is very important in our lives. Not only will increase our awareness of the world we live in but also push our scientific knowledge out from the boundaries. People should acknowledge the importance of familiarizing with the world news and do not keep our minds inside a bubble zone
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, kind of, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2861.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 591.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84094754653 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93056706295 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84661111655 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494077834179 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 896.4 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.6140966255 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.238095238 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173216033491 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531163311538 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615294469975 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120367882882 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765680436357 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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