Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, using the television and the online movie platform is expanding. There are debates about the effect of that on youth. Some people believe there is no concern about that but I strongly hold on to the idea movies and television have a negative influence on how they behave.
The first and foremost reason coming to my mind is that no one doubt about wasting the time on television shows and movies. On the other hand, they have attractive scenes that addict the youth to watch constantly such as action, nude, exciting, and romantic scenes that are their favorite According to their age. So, they will be encouraged to spend more time watching. I remember an example of myself when I was younger, between twenty and twenty-one years old, I was addicted to watching tv series. That years were the expansion of the release of great series of cinema including the Game of Thrones, Breaking Bad, Big Bang theory, and other high-quality series. Some days I, just, had two or three hours of sleep and I did not go to my university class. I would stay in the dormitory and watch my favorite series. I failed that semester in three of seven courses that semester I had, such I suffered to pass them the next semester. And this effect a bad influence on my educational records.
The second worthy reason is that, would direct younger people in a harmful manner. Especially, when a person watches most of the time, he or she is sedentary that which causes gain overweight, blood pressure, dry eyes, and other diseases which relate to sedentary. Besides, movies and shows are contents that can be reasons for most misbehavior in teenagers. Some of that has pornography content, rough scene, and unreal viewpoint about life. I point to research the effect of a movie with full nudity scenes on a google search of this movie and its phrase getting used in this movie by juveniles. After the release of American pie on January 2014 searching for man's and women's genitals rose twenty-fold in the USA at that time, and most researchers were teenagers between 14 to 23 years who watched this movie secretly despite the fact movie belonged just to over eighteen people. So, this moves younger people in changing their needs and misbehavior at that age.
In conclusion, movies and television have very negative effects on younger people, more than two reasons that I pointed the previous paragraph that they spending time more than regular time on this platform and their misconduct of affect from movies. So, I think the governors should approve more regulations on watching tv and movie for the youth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, second, so, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80666666667 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48834220186 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535555555556 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6734138614 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187407185823 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549112281011 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571798959572 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140732915598 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623320900009 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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