Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The effects of movies and televisions on young people’s behavior has been, for years, in the limelight of discussion, where people never seem see eye to eye. Regarding this issue, in my opinion, that the benefits of movies and televisions apparently exceed their negative effects.
Admittedly, negative consequences of certain kinds of movies and televisions exist, which may lead to the misconduct of youth. In order to be lucrative, some movie makers utilize violence, sex, and juvenile delinquency. These scenes are teemed with negative description of society. Even though these descriptions are not necessarily realistic, for youth in their formative age, they are prone to imitate in order to show off their so-called “special personality”. Take the famous TV series “gossip girl” as a example. The TV series describe a group of school-age girls and boys who live a lavish life, and have a mess personal life. If a girl watch a show like this, potentially she may treat them as stars and imitate their behaviors. In this case, she can only end up with underage pregnancy.
Negative sides of movies and televisions do exist, however, the virtues of their effects outweigh the detriments, if youth utilize them properly.
First, the significance of educational meaning of movies and televisions should not be ignored. Despite some shows exaggerate the negative side of society, other reveal the positive side of the society, which impart youth with energy and enthusiasm. For example, I’ve watch the movie of Happy Potter. In the last episode of the series, when Harry fight against Voldermold without hesitation, I am encouraged by his behavior.
Second, movies and televisions are also good ways for relaxation. Teenagers nowadays are usually fed up with burdensome school stuffs, many of them may even come on the verge of burning out. If the pressures are concealed, they have the tendency to get depressed. Nevertheless, if they have the chances to watch movies and televisions, which largely prevent them from overwhelming by the schoolwork, the result will be conducive in terms of their psychological health. Imaging that after hard-working for the whole day, is there anything more comfortable and relaxing than sitting on the sofa, watching some tv series whilechewing potato chips? Thanks to the development of technology, youth are equipped with such excellent way for relaxation.
In conclusion, though drawbacks of movies and televisions do exist, they do not surpass the benefits on teenagers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...us TV series 'gossip girl' as a example. The TV series describe a group...
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Line 7, column 353, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Harry) must be used with a third-person verb: 'fights'.
Suggestion: fights
... last episode of the series, when Harry fight against Voldermold without hesitation, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38154613466 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02203234978 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576059850374 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8150211148 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0909090909 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2272727273 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198067860717 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573730914253 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474902253958 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119593071265 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411690461779 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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