Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether movies and television have more negatives effects than positives effects on young's people behavior is controversial. The supporters of young people behave in a positive way when they watch movies or television agree that movies and TV programs enhance their minds and as a result young people would behave in a positive manner. On the other side, critics maintain that television and movies are the worst influence for teenagers. They argue that television could create behaviors in young people that are not healthy for our community. After a very careful consideration, I agree that movies and television have more negatives effects in young people than positive effects.
First, nowadays most of the TV programs are made to show violence scenes. As a result, this create a violent behavior in new generations. Many of teenagers like this kind of programs because they feel heroes, but they do not realize that this behavior it is not accepted by the society. For instance, my neighbor is twelve years old. He is very aggressive with their parents because most of the time he is watching action movies. Even though of his short age he is very violent, that is why all of us are afraid of him in our neighborhood. As you can see this kind of programs are not healthy for a young boy.
Second, young people spend most of their time watching TV or playing video games. This bring as consequences changes in their behaviors, Young people that were active becoming sedentariness and this could create health problems such as obesity and diabetes. Changes in their behaviors is very serious problems for people that are still young, because this could create loss of motivation and disinterested. For example, my son is ten years old, he spends most of his time playing video games. He does not like anything else than playing his games. He does not feel attracted by any other activity. As a result, his mood has changed and now he behaves different than before.
In conclusion, for all that I mentioned before I strongly agree that movies and television have more negative effects in young people than positive effects have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The proper name in singular (Young) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
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...ences changes in their behaviors, Young people that were active becoming sedentariness...
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Suggestion: from
...as changed and now he behaves different than before. In conclusion, for all that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90684931507 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60173592756 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465753424658 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1355268406 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2631578947 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294039121178 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976780472319 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135579125389 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235053685616 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.186584981049 0.0645574589148 289% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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