Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People would be buried in deep thought when they initially see the statement that movies and televisions exert a more harmful influence on the way young people than good effects. Some would argue that it is commonly true that movies affect young people in a bad way. Others, however, hold that young people can benefit from movies and televisions. I, myself, incline to the former one. I will take a closer look at the statement and support by the reason as follows.
The foremost point is with the advent of more and more movies and televisions, these programs place a heavy demand on young people's time. That is, many young people are preoccupying with movies but not studying, which is the current business they have to spend time on. For example, one of my classmates, Lucy, who is used to read a lot after school, has been addicted to a TV series and then spent a lot of time watching television. As a result, she did not get a higher grade on the literature exam. Therefore, movies have a negative effect on the youngsters' study.
Another point worth mentioning is that some movies and televisions that contain profanity and violence bring about harmful effects on young people. Considering mang young people are at the stage of maturing not only emotion but physical, thus it would easier for them to be restless. Some violent scenes on television or films, making them feel so cool even dangerous. But they would emulate those behaviors, especially when they have conflicts with their peers, which is absolutely detrimental for their health and safety.
All in all, granted, young people can learn so much from movies and televisions, such as some educations programs Discovery, but they are more likely to waste their precious time on movies. Even worse, some of them would do something bad due to watching a bad movie. There
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...they have to spend time on. For example, one of my classmates, Lucy, who is used ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, look, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83544303797 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50128952482 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579113924051 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.778927452 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27817874886 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891971356383 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684728037003 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161524941591 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665710337799 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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