Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In my country, young people have a better life today than their parents enjoyed when they were young. Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s world, most of young people do not follow the ways their parents have already established. Nowadays, young individuals try to augment their knowledge to substitute accurate avenues instead the ways their families have adopted. Some might think differently, but I believe that young individuals have a better life rather than their parents in these days. I feel this way for three reasons exploring in the subsequent essay.
To begin with, technology plays a fundamental role on young people lives. In this era, most of young individuals are accustomed to technology in comparison to their families. Not being advance technology like internet and computers in the past years, most families were not able to amplify their activities as soon as possible. For instance, facing to a problem, young individuals immediately refer to the internet and find a solution easily; however, the older people cannot do the same work as well because they do not have the knowledge of the internet usage and it is hard to them to solve their problems like young people do. At a result, had not have young people access in technology, they would have completely been non-educated like their families.
Secondly, education is the next option which asserts the differences between young people’s lives and their ancestors. Establishing universities, institutes, schools, kindergarten, etc. are the most important inventions that have changed the lifestyle for people. Todays, most individuals have keen passion on learning and do their best to understand many faculties of knowledge. In comparison, the old ones who lived in non-academic environment do not have the interest of learning and continue their life naturally. For example, while living with my grandparents, my grandfather told me a story of himself. He mentioned that when he was a young man, going to school was hard to him because there were lots of anomalies from different parts of life. He expressed some limitations such as economic problems, security challenges, not being evolved education centers, family’s distinctions for women, etc. Therefore, according to the words of my grandpa, I resulted that young people have excellent lives rather than elder householders.
To sum up, living in technological conditions let young people to strengthen their trait and increase their abilities. Although young individuals are not experienced like old people; furthermore, they have enough access in technology to learn important examples of life. In this point of thought, I believe that young people have better life than their parents enjoyed when they were young.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3860911271 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96542732793 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532374100719 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9542333194 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.952380952 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403121213461 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123234985144 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102686945691 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280260070819 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649780879875 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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