Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
teenagers are a susceptible part in our society. In toady's development world, adult person would not succeed unless they be taught how to learn do a job during the teenage children. Some people believe that the best way preparing teenage children for adult life is that parents really persuade them to take a part-time task, while others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, teenagers should take a part-time job if they really want to ready for future for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that by taking a part-time job children can get a lot of experience that lead to increase their self-confidence. when teenage child overtake new task partially beside studying in schools, they probably face lots of issues during doing job. Therefore, various problems help them learn novel knowledge that cause to rise self-esteem. For example, when I was in high school, school management set several roles all students should do in order to graduate. The severe law was that took a part-time job in the grocery stores. Unfortunately, at first when I, who was very shy, started my job in big stores where need bold employer to manage work well. Sadly, I could not communicate with customers and they complained about me to administer store. my manager taught me how be manner and solve the problem of customers. As over time, I could get more experience from doing work and increased my self-confidence. As you can see, taking a part-time job have positive role on boosting self-esteem.
Second, doing a part-time task is beneficial for teenage children to acquire plenty of money. The majority of adults person, especially who graduate from university, do not have enough money to begin their own job. if individuals want to progress in futures, they should take a not full-time task from teenager childhood. For instance, when I again was working in grocery store during high school time, at first my employee gave me only five dollars per day. However, as I became experienced worker, he rose my wages to 100 dollars. In addition, buyers gave me very much tip due to the fact I could resolve their requisite. my family always pushed me that saved my income so as to I would institute my own job. After long years, when I finished my university in mechanical engineering, I launched my company where produce advanced cars. This experience taught me that the best ways to prepare children for future is that take a part-time job.
In conclusion, teenager should be encouraged by their parents to take on a part-time job if really want to prepare him or her for adults future. Not only does it impact on children's self-confidence significantly, but also it help children save more money. parents should stimulate their teenage children to do a part-time job to progress in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96405919662 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77689423716 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530655391121 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8256671345 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.3076923077 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1923076923 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342277256024 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106717802256 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944988037293 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251862717275 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668351467935 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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