Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking websites. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
educating is a vital part of our society. As over time, the advent of development technology can impact on educating children whether directly or undirectly. some people believe that this advanced techonology such as cell phone, online games, and social networding web site have positive role on schooling students todays, while others hold the opposite view and assert in the past without any technology, children could learn effectively. In my opinion, nowadays really teaching chilren is very hard task than in the past for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that nowadays spending more time on social networking take up the brain of children that it hurt their educating. social networding is like illusion that attract children who are very vulenarable. when children, especially students, involve with this devise exceedingly, their brain become exhuasted because of volume of unnecessary knowledges. For example, when I was in elementary school, my older sister had cell phone and social networking. At first, I did not know any thing about them and spent all my time to study my coures. She taught me how to use these devise that were attractive for me because I never use them before. unfortunately, when I dealed with them, I allocated all my time for it istead of my studying. In the end of semester, I failed to pass my course and foreever be fired from school. if I never had involved with these stuffs, now I would have be an mechanic engineering.
The another reason is that online games can cause children who should be teached to face harmful thought diseases. some of the games have assertive nature that really hurt to traits of children. if children deal with these devies exteremely, they can not concentrate on their educating. For instance, my friend who was very successful in school spend all his time to acquir high score on exams. One day, his mother purchased a play station for him because of highe average in intermidate school. In summer break, he just played with it and become obsession about playing game all the time. when schools again started in fall, he was very angry so as to he could not paly game. unfortunately, he bother not only his friends but also his teacher. this problem cause my friend to learn his courses and focus on them. this experience taught me that playing game have negative role on the schooling of students.
In conculsion, nowadays technology such as cell phone and other social web site creat serious problem for teaching children. Not only it takes up whole brain of children, but also it hurt students to concentrate on their schooling. We should not allowed to children to use cell phone all the time.
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educating is a vital part of our society. As over...
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...trate on their schooling. We should not allowed to children to use cell phone all the t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95164835165 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6321560328 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52967032967 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9183483572 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6538461538 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73076923077 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221543269462 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609005738893 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485079389655 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144478268267 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288119397393 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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