Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking websites. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that the ever-increasing development of technology has revolutionized human beings’ lives to a great extent. Education as one of the most indispensable parts of individuals’ life is not an exception to this change and improvement. While some people believe that the absence of modern technology was more beneficial since educating children was easier, others stand on another side of the continuum and hold the view that the modernized revolution has made educating much easier. Personally speaking, I am against the idea that educating children in this era is arduous and the reasons to support my idea is substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, nowadays children are equipped with a diverse assortment of apparatus which has favorably affected educating children because it has positively reinforced and motivated children. The hardship of instructing children in today’s era pale in comparison to the past generation, thanks to the advancement of technology being a flourishing breakthrough that has overshadowed every aspect of educating. Students in the past were reluctant to gain knowledge since there was nothing to be enthusiastic for them in the process of teaching and learning; however, nowadays children can enjoy various strategies and devices which in turn make them be more avid and motivated to learn. To put it into a more vivid picture, when I compare myself to my nephew, there is a huge gap in the way we were educated. While my nephew is amazed and eager to learn his studies through the cell phone his father bought him, I used to be depressed and reluctant when it was school time. Should children be provided with new modern equipment, they will have a thirst for knowledge and information.
Furthermore, the new wave of technology development is beneficiary for children’s education since it will improve different skills in children. It is no secret to anyone that the social interaction of children in the twenty-first century has dramatically improved compared to the previous generation which is highly because of the social networking and various applications that children use in order to exchange the flow of information. Not only students benefit from these devices and gadgets to review their course materials, but also they can form groups in which they can conveniently share their ideas with one another. As an illustration, since I am an English teacher, every year at the beginning of the semester I will ask my students to make a group on Telegram in order to communicate with one another and to convey whatever we have learned and discussed in the class. This strategy has helped me to recognize my students’ strengths and weaknesses on a particular subject to be discussed in the upcoming sessions. Moreover, students can benefit from the online class tutorial on the Telegram application and improve their social interaction skills as well.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons into account, I believe that educating children in this modernized world with the abundance of technology and gadgets is easier than it used to be in the past. Children can benefit from the modern education system in which they can use online classes and the like to bond with one another and share their ideas and opinions more conveniently.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2811.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21521335807 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03594214871 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487940630798 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 889.2 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0598662207 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.166666667 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9444444444 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224055592574 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705207787304 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469257757654 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146052731361 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338605510411 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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