Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a doubt, independency has been one the most important concerns of every individual through history, and it is critically important that people be able to make decision about their own lives. While many believe that in comparison with the past, young people are more independent in order to make decision, others disagree with this idea. I strongly believe that nowadays, youth are more independent from family attachments and are able to manage their life better. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, thanks to technological advances and emergence of the internet, which provides a great deal of information, parents are more concern about raising independent children. In other words, the internet pays an influential role in educating people. For instance, parents now are more concern about how to raise confident and self-supporting children. in this regard, they are provided by a vast range of books, tutorials and online courses which encourage them to let their children make their own decisions from childhood. For example, it is an accepted fact that children should be allowed to choose the color of their cloths, their toys, and even decide about which school they want to enroll. Moreover, in comparison with few decades ago, parents are more preoccupied with their personal activities, like their own jobs, needing more time, therefore they are willing to raise their children in a way they can deal with their personal issues.
Furthermore, life in the past was more limited and people had to obey their parent’s decision in different aspects, like marriage. In contrast, nowadays, life has been changing in many aspects in which lead to encouraging people to live their life with the least attachments to families. For example, going to college and university abroad is one of the changes that now is considered normal. consequently, youth are provided by a lot of opportunity in which there are free to make decision and consult with their peers instead of their family and parents. These days, teenagers and young adult easily insist on things they are interested in, from life-style, their major of study or their career. Consequently, all these changes lead people to have a more independent life in which they practice decision making on every given day. As a result, the more the people are get to make decision, the better they are bale to manage their life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that in comparison with past, young people now living a freer life from their family attachments, and are able to make better decision. The emergence of the internet has helped parents to raise their children more independently, on top of that altering lifestyle inevitably result in more independent people. Today's life offers a huge range of option like going to college abroad which provide the platform of self-supporting people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2458.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13152400835 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72036027125 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465553235908 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9517704135 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.9 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.95 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351362239399 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119833870535 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730696270238 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243293526338 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431636813228 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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