Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important for every country to have a long-term plan for development amongst all nations in the competitive world in which we live in. While some might believe that it is more beneficial for a government to spend money on the education of children between age five to ten years old, others disagree with this and they believe it is better to invest money on universities. I would prefer to argue that spending money on universities is more important for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, investing money in university education is of great importance, since most of the experts who needed for making any kind of development in country are being raised and trained in universities. No matter which field a country is planned to succeed from agriculture, engineering or medicine or even human science, all these depend on universities budget. In other world, the more government focus on universities projects, the more they bring advancement to country and will find practical solution for ongoing issues in a society. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this when I was working at a project at university, we were investigating how to find a solution for the problem of low pressure oil reservoirs, and how enhance the quality of explored oil, after three years of working on this problem, we could eventually not only solve the problem, but also make a huge profit for government by selling the patent to other countries which have been struggling with the same problem.
Furthermore, education of children is another result of meticulous research in the universities. In this regard, universities are more important than elementary school since they evaluate and observe the effectiveness of method of education in primary schools. Consequently, if the government decided on prioritizing university education over elementary education for children, they would achieve advancement in both in an indirect way. Moreover, investing in children is not guaranteed since not all of the children are heading toward universities, yet about 90 percent of all advancement in every society is under control of university’s projects. Therefore, without a doubt elevating the level of education in universities have a direct impact on development on every country.
In conclusion, I personally believe that education of universities is playing an influential impact on advancement as well as development of every country, and on top of that quality of elementary education is under control of universities research and investigation. In this regard, it is more important for every government which is concerned with their development to prioritize university education over education of children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an indirect way" with adverb for "indirect"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...in children is not guaranteed since not all of the children are heading toward universitie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 8.0752688172 409% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31890660592 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18435219463 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49430523918 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.4387249006 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.785714286 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3571428571 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381761669033 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144183782271 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909669029678 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255811575154 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10759137832 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 11.7677419355 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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